Post #1 [DrAndonuts]

[An extra note to start off. The average level of writing detail in Frozen is a decent amount greater than in "The Gathering", so each post on this blog will be one, maybe two IF posts long.]

Posted by DrAndounts (Member # 168) on :

I'm deciding to give this IF another chance. Apparantly, there were a few people that didn't take my decision to delete the former version of this IF too well. If somehow deleting that version offended anyone, I apologize.

[Just a reference to the original Frozen]

2 ACs (Introduce with AC NOT knowing what happened & in unique way)
Serious with occasional humor
Novel Format

[Yeah, it was a far cry from "The Gathering", that's for sure. It's probably also my ideal set of conditions for an IF in that time and age too.]
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Ness was at Burglin Park with his three friends. They were having a picnic to celebrate the year they had free of Giygas.

[Good for you four. :)]

"Man, it feels good to be a kid again," Ness sighed, laying back on the blanket.

"It does," Paula agreed wholeheartedly. She fell back to lay next to Ness. She watched the clouds drift by, trying to see if any mimicked another thing. As one floated by, a small, but bright, red dot was visible.

[dun dun DUNN]

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"Is the device ready?" the ship's captain asked.

[A note, the name of the captain of the ship, and the name of the ship will eventually be revealed down the road. It's not an unsolved mystery here.]

"It is ready, but we're not sure if it will work. We haven't had a chance to test it."

"Prepare the device and fire when ready." The captain's chair swiveled away from the scientist. The scientist scampered back to the device.

"What did the captain say?" another lab technician asked.

"He said to prepare for firing the device."

"Did he specify a target?"

"No..." the scientist leaned over to a speaker and pressed a button. "Captain? What is our target?"

"Let's see... how about the planet? Yes, the blue one."

[A note: the italics is the captain talking over the intercom, not mind-speak/telepathy. The scientist appearantly returned to the weapon's testing lab before this point]

"Yes sir." The scientist released the button. "Are you ready?"

"Yes."

"Fire."

A red beam shot from the ship and struck the atmosphere of Earth. A red sphere enveloped the planet.

[and then everyone died the end... nah! XD]

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"Ness, what's that?" Paula asked as she pointed out the red dot in the sky.

"I don't know. The only thing I can think of is that it's a star."

"It can't be a star," Jeff interrupted.

"Why not?"

"It's daylight and the stars' light is always blocked out by the sun's light."

"Oh."

[lol I love how DrAndonuts kept Jeff's scientifical jargon intact. I don't always see IF writers do that. :)]

Just then, the dot started to expand and in a matter of minutes, the sky was now a mix of blue and red, with the red overpowering the blue.

"Ness, what's-" as Paula spoke, she stopped dead. Her body froze in place. Ness, Jeff, and Poo also were immobile. The Earth became frozen in time.

[And with that folks, goes the central premises of Frozen, and of course, the name's meaning. Of course, it's not doom for the Earth. Even with our heroic four friends frozen in time for now. You'll see what I mean later. :P]